I'm really late, but I saw that the first time I read Off-White, but I thought it was just my computer, then I read it again on another computer and it was still there... but then I read the rest of the story and I thought it was Hati. 'Cause that made sense so yeah!! XD
Now Iki is the one who is angry and can not sleep, because the others can not be quiet I really like his angry face and his eyes on the panel next to it once again. The awesome sky with Hati and the moon make a perfect image and add a great atmosphere to the scene once more. The stars are really pretty and I would just love to count them all…But as Iki has just said, it’s not possible. The mountains under the moon, lit by it and the stars are done so wonderful. It reminds me of my trip to the alps two winters ago. Yawning Iki is pretty cute here too.
I know I already commented but I feel like I have to add something about that red star in panel 3
The idea you had is amazing! But if I have to be frank, I had not noticed the shape the clouds formed. If I hadn't read the comment, I would have probably realized too late. Fact is, in my opinion, the red star is a little too bright. Sure, it stands out of the others stars (also because it's the only red one), but as I said before, it's kind of hypnotizing, and a little distracting, as I wasn't able to see the shape beneath it.
But then again, it may just be me, since it seems that all the other deviants managed to spot the cloud shape My suggestion would be to turn the red star off a little. It would still be visible because it's the only red thing in the entire page, but it wouldn't look out of place this way
Other than that, I think this page is amazing and the idea of the cloud is brilliant!
I love the artwork on the first panel! The way the clouds are shaped as if a black wolf is going to engulf the moon. The red star as its' eye. A bit eerie really, but beautiful. Maybe its foreshadowing something?